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Uhm, unlike Bri, I like Michael better. Nate can go...nevermind. hahahaha. anyways. again, this is short and so there isnt really much to comment on. So off i go!

Again, this is really short. grr face. I like how well you detailed everything. I love it! you are painting a lovely vampiric picture. nice nice, very nice. off i ...

Where is Nate??? Oh, yay! Halfway mark!!! on i go

I like this chapter. Not many can pull of the hunt. Nicely done. I love it. Nothing to critique, im afraid im of no help to you. But i like ...

ballerina13 - Thanks for reading. This piece is for a junior project in school. The final product will be my grade. eep! heh, thanks for the advice. I'll deffinitly take ...

Edited Review please?

Trashytoni- I'm glad you think so. I don't believe I will continue on this topic. It was more of a one time thing. But, thanks anyway. Smileforever- Glad you liked ...

Springrain2693: In my english class, we are going over the term 'Parallelism' which according to my teacher is repeating words to get that dramatic feeling. So that is basically where ...

Rascalover: Thanks for reading. I completely agree with that you on that line. It really doesn't fit. Night Mistress: As always, thanks for reading. XD Your opinion is always welcome. ...

I love the additions. You did a lot better with the punctuation. I saw a very few mistakes. You has some double words. When she was in her classroom, the ...

Thank you everyone!!!!! I'm about to post the third part. I'm not exactly sure how much longer this is going to be yet. still deciding in my head. The name ...

Hello again!!! Yay revisions! A few things that you mussed were the Tag punctuations. I pointed most of them out to you and you caught them, but there was still ...

AHHHH ALL OF MY CHAPTERS HAVE BEEN EDITED FOR LENGTH!!!! They are all shorter so there are more chapters. Go review them!!!!

Hey everyone!!!!! I'm going through all my chapters and editing them! YAY!!! So chapters 1-8 are going to be shorter and completely different!!!!!!!! If any confustion tell me!

w-w-why?