jasmine12

Hey, just thought I'd do a quick one over for you. This is what I saw (and sadly it isn't much.) They saw only the black shoelaces of his old ...

Hello. Can I just say how intimidating your writing is to me. Ha, I feel like a new-b after reading this. I honestly found little mistakes and right after I ...

"I need to dash out, be back in a few minutes," I said. "Is it time for Mum's medicine yet?" "In a few minutes. I'll deal with it. There's some ...

AHHH CHAPTER SEVEN!!!!!!!!!! But I didn’t know that my personal problems had travelled through the entire school. Damn those conjunctions! I sat down at the normal table with the group ...

Helloo. i just realized that every time I pointed out a conjunction to you, i spelt it wrong. Its conjunction not congunction....I spell horribly. Only two things i noticed this ...

What first got my interested was of course the title. Which is a good thing. Tess is only sixteen, normally it's at that age that girls are the most self ...

“Hiya there. Is there a free room about that me and Amelia here can use?” Amelia and I can use. Not to nit pick or anything, but at my school ...

Hello again. I just can't stop reading this story. I believe I am officially hooked.....that's a good thing. I'm going to ask you to be very braver, braver than you've ...

I am trying to keep up with this story. Haha. My computer keeps shutting down and going really slow. So here we go... I looked at her blankly. She heaved ...

Immediately thoughts came flowing into my head of my grandmother . Comma after Immediately. What helps me out is reading my story out loud so that when I pause, i ...

Hello. I love this story and can relate to the character Amelia, I think a lot of people can. Some of the things that you describe happening to her, happens ...

Hi. It took me a long time to review this. My dogs decided now was the perfect time to go crazy (i have three) and my mom kicked me off ...

Okay first i want to say, i know nothing about Elvish or anything like that but i am always open to new things. Also, you pointed out that only hybrids ...

hey, good story. you either do martial arts or you spent a lot of time studying it. someone told me that you write your experiences so go experience life. and ...

I like this story. You do an excelent job with describing everything. shook his head violently as his thin, wrinkled, lips pursed into a tight crease. You have a comma ...