jackolantern

this is beautiful and horrific at the same time. You're imagery reminds me of an explosion, escpecially the section about peices of the subject being draped over plastic hangers. The ...

I really liked your peice-especially the transformation from happy wonderland to 'fiery hell'. it was very unexpected. Howevery, your writing loses its voice on the last line. is there any ...

very well written, but a bit confusing. your meatphore with the color blue and the rain, " blue is a lovely color, and the rain is a wonderful freind" is ...

I love this poem! its fantastic. I really like the way you have written it without a definite format, more like it was a casual convesation or a flow of ...

I think your peice has a story line that could be really interesting, and poignant. but your peice seems kind of rushed. in the first paragraph, "it weren’t for Claire’s ...

I really liked your peice, and i hope that you feel better soon! The ending, with the blurs and the back of the mind was my favorite part, even though ...

What was your inspiration to write this peice? it is very realistic, and very sad. It has a wonderful sense of closure at the end which alot of stories, especially ...

this is one of the most beautiful poems i have ever read! you should never ever ever stop writing! no matter how long our wrinkled hands stretched towards them and ...

I really enjoyed your peice. it is complicated, but not overcomplicated, which really complimented your theme. however, i couldn't help noticing that she is really really hard on this guy. ...

i liked this poem, but i was a little confused too. i think that its fine not to be direct with poetry because part of the art of it is ...

I really like the tone of your poem...its haunting. Your imagery is also really great! I think it would be even better if you changed some of your line's sentence ...

I really really liked it! the only thing I would say, is that there are some places where you add extra s's, which disturbs the flow of your writing. Also ...