ireylcadence

Sorry, posted twice.

Thank you very much for taking your time to review this. Your comments were quite helpful. :)

Thanks for the critiques! Bubblewrapped, I agree, now that I look back on it, I feel like there should be at least one more stanza between the first and the ...

A non-cliche approach to love. Congratulations :) I like this very much, the style, the writing technique, the imagery, all of it. No criticism for you.

Thanks for the review. :)

I like the idea. Like the others said, though, it's a bit too simplistic. I would also work on the overall rhythm of the piece: some lines, for example the ...

Hey guys, thanks for the critiques. I wasn't actually trying to rhyme. I'm not sure where exactly you guys see the rhymes, but if all of you think so, I ...

Wow, I've read enough poems that can create beautiful images, but I think this is the first one that's also done the same with smells and tastes.

Thanks everyone, for the welcomes and the reviews. :) You guys are right about the last stanza--I wasn't sure what to do with it so I kind of just got ...