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  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Not afraid to die

    What I See: I quicken my pace to leave this place quicker -to leave this place sooner? maybe. Using quick again is frustrating to the reader. -Sometimes you use capitals ...

    Sep 26, 2005
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: the price is right

    What I See: line 11: you should be your line 13: should there be a period at the end? How I Feel: I liked this poem. The sadness is conveyed ...

    Sep 26, 2005


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