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Overall I liked it and thought it was an interesting format. Bu the part, "Or looking at Ginny. Because that's what I'd do. If I saw Ginny." didn't seem like ...

I love the character Vikki Shawnston, and I thought it was great how she brought down Brittany Geller. It seemed like maybe she should have dissed Brittany in some way ...

This is a strong first chapter, but there's a few things maybe you should consider changing. In the phrase, "I snap, losing the last of my short supply of endurance," ...

I think that this is a really powerful prologue to the story. I especially thought the whole part where Lissa is sobbing for her sister to come back was well ...

I enjoyed reading this story, especially since I have always wanted to know more about gypsies ever since I watched "The Hunchback of Notre Dame" when I was little! I ...

Wow that's a really suspenseful beginning to the story! Overall it's pretty good. There's just a few things you should maybe fix.... The one phrase, "The predictions the man that ...

I enjoyed reading your story. I thought it was cool how you wove in the phrases 'once upon a time' and 'happily ever after' but you didn't just use them ...