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Wow! I really enjoyed this, I could empathise with every line!

Very good piece, however the line Where sunset sailors often hide away doesn't seem to fit, but that may just be me. Very nice poem, I enjoyed it!

Interesting. The only nit-pick I have for you is sometimes I couldn't tell who was speaking. Be sure to make it clear who is speaking. It was a very interesting ...

I really joyed it. I especially loved the ending, it tied the whole piece together nicely. When it grammar and such I believe everyone else covered what I would

Very interesting. You kept switching past and present tense, but that was about the only grammatical error I saw. Also, the main character could have been developed a little more, ...

You have very good style, I only saw a few mistakes that could easily be fixed. However, I'd like to see you write something that hasn't been done 200 times ...

That was good. Can't wait to see where this goes.

This sounds like it could get very good. What I did see though, is that in places where you used a dash, you should have used a semi-colon. Also, you ...

Amazing! I saw a few simple mistakes, but I can't wait to hear the rest of this.

Wow! Very good I was drawn right into the story. Saw a few type-os, but no major mistakes Can't wait for the next part!

I am a huge Avatar fan and I think you did a wonderful job. The only thing I would change is that I don't think Zuko would use the word ...

Loved the story. I only saw one thing I would change: you used the word "guy" once, which isn't in 17Th century vocabulary. Inter sting story and very good characters.

Good story line, but I caught several structural errors. Try to keep your sentences a little shorter, capitalize your I's, and watch punctuation. Other then that I enjoyed it.

Wow. You've got me hooked, you just need to develop the characters.

Very interesting. The first part is good, a little rough in places, but good. The second part seems a little slow and wordy, but I'd like to see where you ...