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hey thanks so much for the in depth review! i think the reason i was overly descriptive is that this is my first attempt at the first person narrative, and ...

just people's general thoughts and if they liked it. i wanted to know if this kind of shock humor had appeal, or if it was just funny to me. i'd ...

i knew it wouldn't appeal to everyone. you're taking this story much more seriously than i intended. it isn't supposed to make a lick of sense or have any basis ...

i wrote this piece knowing that many people would be turned off by the graphic content, but i didn't write it for them anyway. i wrote it for the people ...

thanks so much, glad you enjoyed the story ^-^

not a lot. i'm sure you could catch them with an editing session.

yeah that's a good idea, looking up some old english. i wanted to give samuel an edge so i had him use harsh, provoking language, but i guess it's confusing ...

heh, thanks.

i used a lot of pronouns because i wanted to *avoid* excessive name dropping. is that a mistake? and i realize that i switch in and out of old english, ...

the murder of Karlya will be explained more later. do you really think the "entering Ophem" part is that bad? i never really noticed. i'll do something with it in ...

Adre had the upper hand at the end of 6. Abrand had stabbed him in the back but it wasn't enough to even slow Adre down, since Hades had granted ...

oh haha, woops. my grammar is crap sometimes, i'll get rid of those pesky commas in the next draft. and thanks for all the nitpicks.

alright, thanks for the tip. i'm still learning how to narrate fight scenes so i'm glad you commented on that, i'll try it in the next draft. and probably clean ...

hey i'm really glad you're enjoying my story. thanks for pointing that misplaced "but" out, i'll get it in the next draft. it's reassuring to hear i'm doing things correctly, ...

hey i'm really glad you're enjoying my story. thanks for pointing that misplaced "but" out, i'll get it in the next draft. it's reassuring to hear i'm doing things correctly, ...