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Hey man, this is really good. You've painted a detailed picture of the world that Kira exists in, and set up the plot of the rebellion really well. Kira is ...

hey, got a review for you. most of what i was going to say was covered by girlwhowrites. i'll touch on some of them anyway. a lot of your sentences ...

hey, review for you. i'll tell you straight away, i love your writing style. its extremely descriptive and allows the reader to see ordinary things like sunsets in a new ...

hey. you drove home the fact that Imogene is turning into a woman with her attraction to Henry and the paperboy, other than that not much happened this chapter. you ...

hey. i am really enjoying this story. i have a question: are Jane's circumstances and/or personality mirrors of your own? i ask this because you seem to have a solid ...

hey. i think this is superb. first off, i'm glad you included that fond memory of Jane with her father, as it adds complexity to his character and shows that, ...

hey, review for you. i really appreciate the research you've done for this piece. however, like i said about chapter one, the godess's personality seems a bit stiff and unimposing. ...

hey, i has review for you. first thing that jumped out at me was the mixture of gods from many cultures. this threw me off at first, but as i ...

Hey, got a review for you. While I get a feel for the characters' motivations, I think getting deeper into their thought processes is important. You only get Asenath's point ...

Hey, got a review for you. Millicent seems to have a lot of potential as a strong character, if you delved more deeply into her thought process. What keeps her ...

Hey man, this is absolutely excellent. You have an impressive vocabulary that really helps illuminate scenes and characters. Flitchling is a very interesting character, obviously there's a lot to him ...

Hey man, got a review for you. I don't normally enjoy amateur writing styles, but I sensed a lot of symbolism in yours and it kept me interested. The story ...