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Thanks what you pointed out spelling and grammar not my strong point so it's nice to know.

This is actually pretty good. It dose need some serious work but it's a really good idea. I think that you shouldn't write it off because it's an early piece. ...

Hi I love the idea. i think you should continue writing it. My best bit of advice would be to explain the death of Kies sister I guess you would ...

Thanks :)

Thanks but I'm not American by the way. No worries though.

It's a good character sketch but it was unclear. I liked the start a lot by the way. It was really descriptive. The end was unclear. Maybe you could explain ...