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  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Disappearing Hate

    It was good, just remember to change youre upper and lower cases on letters. Personally I usually don't care about the length of a poem, but this one could almost ...

    May 5, 2009
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: The Reflection

    Good job, i like how the rythem at the begining is a little off, but gets smoother latter it adds to the character of the poem, even if you didn't ...

    May 5, 2009
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Blood

    Wow, another amazing poem. This is so realistic and kind of scary. the scketchy rythem addds to the feelings and thoughts of the character. Be careful of you're capitalization, i ...

    May 5, 2009
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Pulse

    Eather here or lyric poetry, not shure. This was a nice poem, short and simple, and straight to the point ( in it's own way). Just change the letters from ...

    May 5, 2009
  • Lyrics » General, General Re: (Rise) For This

    Great lyrics, I agree it's very catchy. I love the meaning of the song, really inspiring. usually when I read songs or poems I would post my favorite parts, but ...

    May 5, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Untitled, chapter two part one *edited*

    So, this is where it really starts to get interesting. One thing I would change is the strange way this line is worded: Good job I’m not a regular smoker. ...

    Apr 22, 2009
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Beauty

    Beautiful poem. this is something all young girls should read. No body should be anything else but themselves. Forever Threnody already pointed out all of your spelling errors. And i ...

    Apr 9, 2009
  • Short Story » Action / Adventure, General Re: gone

    The fact that it's all over the place is explained in the next chapter. Sorry if it's confusing.

    Apr 8, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Untitled Chapter one part two *first edit*

    I like this because it shows us the personality of your main character.otherwise anything I would have mentioned has already been written above, so I won't bore you by repeating ...

    Apr 7, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Untitled prologue

    I like the story idea this has started, it's a whole nother point of view I do,'t think anyone has written yet.

    Apr 7, 2009


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