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A pat on the back: When I came back to find another chapter, after a few days of having not read, I instantly remembered everyone; that almost never happens when ...

Haha, here we are, part two! (and much better this part is, too, b/c, methinks, ye have more dialogue) First off, question: Um…why are you using only single quotes? Beyond ...

Chapter Three Kivan noted the first drops of rain without alarm, merely puling up the hood of her cloak and maneuvering her pack so that it hung within the waterproof ...

Chapter 20 “Did you miss me, little master?” Avarn, curled in his chair before the fire, awoke to the smell of brimstone, burning, and the dry, desert-like breath that he ...

This looks to be as good as your other stuff; keep at it, and sorry I can't be more helpful. That's what I needed to hear most right now, darling. ...

*blinks, blinks* Wow, people like my stuff here, apparantly. I shall have to remember that I seem to be good at this... Thanks to all the wonderful people who have ...

You're a lifesaver, darling!!! You've given me exactly the information I needed on what was going wrong here, and I think I can really make some improvements. Your points about ...

Thank you very much for the advice, ducks! *sweeps bow* I'm glad so many people seem to like this! I actually did it for a school assignment awhile back.

you have something against conjunctions? I noticed you left them out in several places. Maybe it's just a thing all we Lizes do, maybe it's a style thing, all I ...

hehe...yes, I do have a nice way to kill him, just not now. Oh, and btw, I did that "Not a killing blow" twice on purpose, parallellism, you see. *taps ...

*stands in wonder* *sniffs, wipes tear* *stands in more wonder* Amazing, darling. It's really not fair that you can be so awesome at prose, and then churn something like this ...

Arg! me terrible friend! :smt021 shall get right on it!!!

Chapter 19 Nadak ran at the back of the Wolf-pack. Good thing, too, they were in a state to rip anything even vaguely Gypsie-shaped to pieces. He had no idea ...

Thankee, Shadowsun! *gives cookie*

Danteel watched her sleep, his eyes fixed on the golden collar encompassing her slim throat. He had forced himself to stay with her as the collar was fastened. Even though ...