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Hey there! Cool statement, dude, I hope I can be helpful here. Okay, first, you might want to remove your full name from it, just a safety measure, you understand. ...

I really like the format and style of this poem, mizz-iceberg, but like darky.demark I'm a little puzzled by the use of the "of"--without a subject for that preposition, the ...

Most of the flaws I found were purely technical/grammatical, a few of which I shall here expound upon: For the first time in my life I feel alone like every ...

Ooo, very enjoyable. I especially liked the constant car metaphor, especially when you compared it to his arrogance. The unfinished phoenix tattoo was intriguing--a part of me is a little ...

Yes, I know, I'm terribly over-due, please forgive. She sat outside, watching the sunset. The last rays warmed her skin as she enjoyed the mesmerising sight. She had enjoyed many ...

>insert usual apologies about tardiness< The rain thrummed on the cottage roof Awesome verb. while it was still light. Erg, I’m not a huge fan of this phrase, but neither ...

I really quite enjoyed it. Once again, Gaiman shows his talent for the bizarre, especially that strange mixture of familiar and fantastic for which we love him so much. The ...

Hey there, darling! I realize this comes a little later than you might have hoped, and I’m sorry it took me so long. I hope you won’t mind if I ...

Orpheus' lute was strung with poets' sinews , Whose golden touch could soften steel and stones, Make tigers tame and huge leviathans Forsake unsounded deeps to dance on sands. The ...

Haha. *smug* I realize I’ve already given you my first critique on this, and you’ve probably not yet integrated it into this thread, but seeing as how you’re a tad ...

Wow, I'm glad the Proff was here before me--now I don't feel so bad about not giving you a nit-picky crit. ‘Oh it does!’ I had assured him. ‘It was ...

Here I am! All will be well. ;) It was ever so within the bounds of the massive walls that enclosed them. That enclosed what? – as normal as his ...

Mwahaha! *is first critiquer of new chapter* and through my ulster. Um…what’s an ulster? Resek’myr’s quarters / from Resek’myr’s door / Resek’myr’s hut After awhile, I think “the”

While you may not be a poet, you have every right to be proud of this poem. I’m not much of a poetry-editor, but I loved it. Your use of ...

See! Look at all the other in-depth critiques you're getting, what do you need me for? ;) Seriously, though, I'm putting you on my list of things to at least ...