gyrfalcon

Yay! Rohsair finally! :-) Well, here goes: I stumbled, my bare feet slipping and sliding in the desert sand, and stubbed my toe on a hidden rock or pebble. Yelping ...

I loved it! For me, it was like watching a champion figure skater competition, every move graceful and flawless, every piece coming promptly and perfectly after the one before it--bravo! ...

Very much a good poem, darling! It had the rythm and taste of narrative, but you never got stuck on story-like details, you kept the flow going in a very ...

I'll admit it's difficult to get into a short poem, but I found this one especially hard to "click" with. Perhaps try starting out with something that gives us more ...

I enjoyed it - how could I not? - but for some reason I find myself feeling that it promised so much and failed to deliver. I kind of got ...

Well, I saw that you had done something in historical fiction, so of course I jumped right over here to see! It is very long, though, and also about one ...

It wasn't so much the repetition itself that bothered me as the fact that you ended three lines with "sorrow." Also, there was a lot of straight-up description here, maybe ...

I started reading it, and your beginning certainly hooked me (though I changed your rating to PG-13, call me old-fashioned but this isn't something I'd want my 12-yr-old sister reading). ...

While there's nothing wrong with your story, it does have a lot of what you get with your basic raiding accoung--lotta violence, rolling heads, and yes, ravishing town women. I ...

Personally, I've never played the game and I don't know that much about it, and yet I really did enjoy it! You didn't put too many things in there that ...

Ender's Game and Ender's Shadow , both by Orson Scott Card The King of Attolia by Megan Whaelen Turner (also in series: The Thief and The Queen of Attolia ) ...

Hey, I guess I'd better check these out. My little brother's an avid Garth Nix fan and he's been pestering me to read them for AGES. I always thought they ...

Okay, I'm going to have to take this in little chunks. Please know that I crit because I care--I wouldn't even glance at this if I didn't think it was ...

Incan, your poetry is not what I'd generally call my style, but I've grown to love it as I love fine wine. I'm afraid I don't have much of a ...

I read the first poem, really liked it, started to read the second and thought "what the heck, what does this have to do with sirens?" It would be really ...