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Any ideas for the name of the horse or do you think I should just leave him without a name?

Okay, I admit. The un-human thing was a bit too much this far into things. I have an idea for the bad guy plot! The bad guy (maybe another hare, ...

Here are some random things that i thought of. Things NOT to do in this story. 1. Humanize: don't make Harestin a human with big ears and feet, make him ...

I can't add much to the other comments; but if your story is anything like the prologue, it should be great! If you do anything more on it (which I ...

Oh, and about posting more soon...I might try a few more excerpts but probably won't start posting the full story untill later.

hi! Thanks a lot for your comments, everyone. :D They help a lot. To Griffinkeeper: First, the reason for a lot of the problems and confusion with this story is ...

The Bane of the Lich “Flee! Flee all you spawn of fire for your bane is coming! The great halls of Dali burn in the ashes of your carnage, your ...

Thank you for your ideas and stuff. I wrote this one in like 20 minutes so you can see why it wasn't all that great :P. Anyway, I've got more ...

I'm doing Dugon, it does sound better; more fanasy-like. I again

Hey thanks! Sorry if you'll be utterly disappointed :P but I have not really made up a language, just made up the word on the spot; but still, it's a ...

Just a paragraph. Something I had to do for English, though it would be an interested start to a longer story...

Thanks for your comments. Sadly this is just a random short story I wrote and I'm busy with a novel, so no there won't be more. But there will be ...

Thanks for your comments. This was a very quickly written story (I think for English class) so I didn't edit it very well. I'll try to improve in my next ...

Thanks! I'll keep that in mind (i always have trouble with description, way too much or too little) :P.

Note: I probably won't change this story much because it is old and I am busy working on a longer one now, but any comments are very appreciated. You might ...