greenjay

It's good, but kind of rushed (as a prelude it's fine). Another thing, a HARE named HAREstin. You might be a little more original. The animal idea isn't bad though ...

All in all, AWESOME! Great fluid style, intense and interesting plot, and good characters (well only one so far). I like how it is about an older guy, most stories ...

Looking very good (I like this kind of stuff, knights and all :P). Anyway, you might add a little more of an introduction, seems kind of abrupt. Good job! Keep ...