graveyard_dream

i really enjoyed reading that, didn't study it in depth so i didn't detect any errors. but can't wait to read more.

no, i was refering to the dreams, it is saying that the dreams themselves died, not the person.

[quote="janice"][i]Petrified. Those lids refuse to close Perhaps, they will cease to open once more?[/i] One small thing, you contradict "refuse to close" with the phrase"cease to open". If possible,

[quote="BlackDaisy"]Yeah, it is really good. The only thing that confused me was in the second stanza the first line says "dreams of flying" and then the last line "has now, ...

i think it is too structured, try scattering the words across the page, let the layout help tell the story.