goalfish100

Hey there! Just a few nit picks. There is three short sentences here, try to vary them a little so it flows properly. The sirens begin screaming during dinner. Momma ...

Hey there! I have to say, what a great poem. Your sadness and anger is reflected greatly and you convey the emotions so well. I love the layout and the ...

Hey there! Just a few nitpicks. Ollie heard Adylyn giggle , "I've never been happier," she whispered; Ollie peeked peered would be a better word around the corner and saw ...

Hey there! Yes I would agree that Wicked is second to none. It is the best musical I have ever seen. One of the reasons being I never knew what ...

Hey there! Throughout the piece you convey great emotion and you don't loose that throughout the piece so well done. It really helps us get into the characters shoes and ...

Hey there! I'd haven't got anymore nit picks really as everyone else seems to have covered them, although in general you have managed to use correct grammar and punctuation so ...