gazdemon

It is the first song I have posted on here, but not my first song. Thanks for the crit, but I shan't be changing the lyrics, I can sing it ...

These words are nicely put together and I could almost put a tune them. The structure you have is good also. Thanks!

Simple and effective. You got the point across in an interesting way; it was good to read. x

That was really funny! Very realistic I guess, easily read, good grammar...nothing to crit really, just to say it was awesome!

I LOVE this song, you can instantly sense the rhythm and the tune. It makes me want to dance sooo much. The lyrics are witty, the rhymes are even wittier...sheesh! ...

I am a real nature freak, so I loved this. The parallel between the seasons and twisting clock hands, it is very vivid. ...I would have liked it to be ...