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Oh, um, in the eighth stanza, the word "they" is not referring to the bars, but to people. Thanks so much for the review.

I didn't enter, but thanks for the suggestion. It means a lot.

Thanks, Mary. And...um. Thanks, Asha. Nice...enthusiasm?

Ha. No, actually, the MC's a girl. And a straight one at that.

I just edited it. Well...posted the edited version. I decided to turn this into my NaNo for last November, so it's a novella thing now. This is just the beginning.

I'd suggest to reformat this so that it's in proper stanzas. I doubt many people will review it when it isn't exactly poetry in its current state. PM me when ...

Thanks, guys. That's not very helpful, but thanks. Wait, is this even a ballad?

Thanks. Punctuation isn't really my thing. It kind of confuses me sometimes. I just slam it in there. Haha.

Aw. Thanks, Madel.

Thanks everyone.

Thanks for a review, no matter how crappy! Haha.

Thanks! Well, it's not so much that either of us are physically leaving, so much as we're parting emotionally.

Thanks, everyone.

Oh, yeah. That was a great book.

Yep. There's my life for ya. Getting out of the water turns out to be easier said than done.