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Re: The Sonnet of Silent Death
I really enjoyed the poem, I am sorry I do not have much advice for you about how to improve the poem. I think it is fine the way it ...
Nov 22, 2010 -
Re: To all my best friends on YWS.
awww *hugs you so tight* you are so amazing!!
Nov 22, 2010 -
Re: A whisper of Love
Aww Isha, that was an amazing review. You gave me a boost of confidence there!
Nov 15, 2010 -
Re: A whisper of Love
Hey there, Foxy. I won't dig into this as ruthlessly as I normally do because a.) I'm tired and b.) I'm confident in your own editing capabilities that you can ...
Nov 15, 2010 -
Re: The Sonnet of Silent Death
I love it! Love it!! *dances around like a little girl* Nice apocalyptic mood and imagery, beautiful words. Hurrah! :D aww, aren't you a cute little one! I'm glad you ...
Nov 15, 2010 -
Re: The Sonnet of Silent Death
Interesting use of words. I enjoyed the structure of the poem and I enjoyed reading it. Needs some editing, but most of what is needed has already been stated. Although, ...
Nov 11, 2010 -
Re: The Sonnet of Silent Death
This is beautiful! (: You're incredibly talented. Thank you so much!
Nov 11, 2010 -
Re: The Sonnet of Silent Death
I like this, and I think this poem would make good lyrics for a song. It's not particularly emotive, for me, but it's very dramatic and the language is really ...
Nov 6, 2010 -
Re: The Sonnet of Silent Death
I love the stanzas and rhyming and all.... It's well written, but it didnt really touch me... it was more like a well-written text that flowed good and my mouth ...
Nov 6, 2010 -
Re: Removed for Editing
Lumiz this was really nice. I was unbelievably attracted to the way you described your images. Great poem, I wonder what a poem about true love would sound like if ...
Nov 4, 2010 -
Re: The Sonnet of Silent Death
I like the poem, although that pain that you are trying to show in the piece is long overdue, you lag on getting to the point. I like the poem ...
Nov 4, 2010 -
Re: Enamored
Hello, Miss Foxy! To return the favor, I am now here. =)) This is prose, right? =D/ And honestly, it's good. Though I do have some nitpicks for you: I ...
Nov 4, 2010 -
Re: The Sonnet of Silent Death
Hey foxy! I like this line the best: You’re dancing in the middle of a hurricane You’re dying, but enjoying the fatal pain. And that's mostly because the other stuff ...
Nov 2, 2010 -
Re: The Sonnet of Silent Death
Shooting stars that wound and hurt That wound? That sounds a bit odd, and you don't need to mention wound and hurt in the same line, it's redundent. Raining clouds ...
Nov 2, 2010 -
Re: Living This Feeling
This is one amazing poem! I loved how you linked the two lovers within the images you have described ealier. It was deep and honest. The way you would sacrifice ...
Oct 28, 2010
