flytodreams

Hey there! The plot looks great, and I think it could be pulled off, if you just edit this piece. The first paragraph was really long, and it was littered ...

Hey there! Welcome to YWS! :) Well, this was too terribly short, there's practically nothing to review. But. I like it. :D Just imagine. Think. This sounds awkward. Choose one ...

Hey, In my opinion, the main character *did* come off as melodramatic, and there was no trace of cynicism. Your writing style was fantastic though, and something about a Dreamwalker ...

Hey there! The idea of this story sounds really interesting, but such stories aren't enjoyable to read unless you really get the reader emotionally involved. In my limited experience. :) ...

Hi, Ooh, mysterious. You've really intrigued me! I'll definitely keep writing. The prologue rocked, and I'm started to be really attached to Freeda. :lol: The characterization is wonderful. Keep writi

Heya, This piece is very cool. :lol: Freeda's character is freaky. I like it! :) Keep writing!

Hey, Oh my gosh, your writing style intimidates me. This can't have been written Word-warring! :? It's really good, I liked your style, but I agree with someone up there ...

Hi I must confess, I'm crazy about this piece. :D It flowed very well, and the end left me starving for more. Rachel fascinated me, I thought she was a ...

Heya! There were a few grammar problems in the story, that distracted from it a bit. It also went a little too fast, and it doesn't seem like anything big ...

Hiya! I'm here. :D This was a great piece, you really captured the emotion, and the characterization is AWESOME. In the second part though, you could add a little more ...

Be prepared.. :lol: I have NO experience when it comes to poetry, hence my opinion can't really count, but I really like this! Your style, the wording, the idea, it ...

Hello WOAH. You completely threw me off-balance there! First you start with a fantasy name and setting, and then you throw in modern technology and dialogue. That was a bit ...

Hiya, I really like this! The plot, or what of it you revealed, sounds really interesting. The sentences flowed very well. But the vanishing-with-a-puff-of-smoke thing at the end didn't sound ...

Heya, I think you really should add the fantasy element in, or anything else that's suspenseful, because this seems too boring. :( The style, and flowing, was fine, but if ...

Heya This was...amazing. I have no experience with horror-fantasy, but this was just a pure masterpiece. I really loved your writing style. With this piece, you managed to hit the ...