faith

Brad, someday I'm going to find you and shove a box of fig newtons down your throat. everyone else- thanks for the comments...this poem is probably the most personal i've ...

did you mean, 'angel'?

to be honest i've never really taken much notice of your work before now, but after reading this I'll make sure to read everything you put on here. In otherwords, ...

oh wait, I have one, actually: littlewaterdroplets how many times have I warned you against cheap tricks brad, how many? otherwise, beautiful.

I think you showed this to me before but I don't think I articulated how much I really liked it. I have no criticism of this piece, which you should ...

see what happens when you stop writing abstract pieces about all the hot boys in the universe? you actually write good poetry.

and who's the bitch now? *grin* this may require a response of its own...i'll think about that.

Dr. Seuss commits suicide! hee

she does. *grin*

yes everything has been said before, but the trick is saying what's been said and making it clever or powerful or interesting again. which this, unfortunately, failed at.

heh. everyone loves a little dark humor.

heh...its like one big happy acid trip. actually I like its..its like free association, and its pretty.

hmmm... this could be a really good poem, but the perky rhyme scheme really negated any drama...made it sound more like an e-mail forward than anything...i would try a rewrite ...

quit sulking brad, you're not that bad and you know it.

I like the rhythm to this, and it had a simple clarity, not cloulded by too many metaphors and similes...but I am a Living Breathing Shell of a person. But ...