eyeofthestorm

Okay, I like the idea of your piece but I think it would be a little better if you polished it. First off, you use and f-bomb and should rate ...

Oh, I really like this! Your rhyme scheme is perfect, it accentuates the feel of the poem. I just love when people use rhymes right. :) I really like how ...

This is really interesting! I can't wait until you post the next part. Just two things I noticed. In the following sentence you spelled "pajama" wrong. "This pyjama guy, whoever ...

Well, first of all, I really like your poem. It's very suspenseful. I think the rhyme scheme is a little distracting, honestly. It gets in the way of what you ...

Hello! Welcome to YWS. :) I really like the idea for your poem, it's very pretty, but I think you could benefit from some slightly more diverse word choice and ...