enzoguy15

Hello! Firstly, I want to make it clear that I don't know much about poetry. I'll try to do my best, though, and I hope it's helpful. Quote: Why my ...

Hi socunfused, I need to agree with Vernon on this one. Please use punctuation to make your work more tidy and attractive for the reader and also help you to ...

Hey, JFW. ^_^ *glee* This was such an incredible story. I really love the small details that you used--the "hum" of the receptionist's computer really struck me. I loved how ...

hester Matheson. I quite like the name. And I like the way you describe him. Nothing stupid and cliche about it. It's also interesting looking at him from another's point ...

Quote: SUNSHINE Lena, the options were light and sharp or dark and blurred! Good ol' Sunshine... Quote: LUKE I'm not trying your nuts. Haha! Quote: ALEX (CONT'D) We're have a ...

Welcome to Young Writers Society. I agree with deafwriter_19 and SuicideKing. But enough with the rule-breaking business. I'll give you a review. I'm kind of a harsh reviewer so don't ...

It wasn't outstanding but it was pretty good. You made good points and you suppoted them, so good job. You made some punctuation mistakes and somwehre in the middle of ...

Maybe it would help if you punctuated the questions differently. "Is it that I'm blind, Blind to the world that surrounds me? What makes me so special, Why see what ...

Hm, nicely written and detailed . I was a little confused at first, but that was quickly cleared up with the flashback thingies (can't think of a better word for ...

I think it was really great. There were only a few problems that I came across. One was punctuation. Somewhere in there after a short sentence, (about 15-20 words long), ...

Rory, I believe right now, you concentrate on too many ideas, which doesn't let any of them be developed that great. My suggestion is you limit yourself to one or ...