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I uploaded a document with the changes; but some further comments here: absolutely finish this story. I'm a little perplexed at why you would even ask that question: everything is ...

OH MY SWEET BURNING RAZZMATAZZ. No swearing outside of literature ;) that was amazing. I thought I was going to hate it when you announced that she had "real beauty, ...

“Meh. Feck it.” I hate to start a critique with me being peeved about one of my pet peeves, but people don't say meh. never, ever, ever. Just like they ...

That was a really beautiful story. I felt that there was a little too much description. Just a little. I feel like a dirty hypocrite for even mentioning it; since ...

Okay I also pasted this into word and will upload a full (really full) review soon. Sorry I'm stuffed with homework I may put this off to the weekend. I ...

Your poll was a little ambiguous; of course, if you love to write, write! Write a book about your adorable border collies, a short story about intergalactic serial killers, what ...

I'm pretty sure everyone else picked up the nitpicks, so I'll just say what I thought as I was reading. One teeny, tiny piece of foreshadowing would be nice. I ...

This was quaint but i really, really liked it. One thing "Why its the unobtainable goals we seek to over come that make us truly alive." Good quote and definetely ...

Okay, I'm going to edit this comment with my review very, very soon. But its late and I have a dentist appointment tomorrow. I copied your document, pasted it in ...

I call myself Yuki and for me, the streets had always been home to me ever since I saw my house in ruins with my parent’s bodies lying by my ...

WOAH. how come pudin gets all of these comments and I have to beg people to come look at my stories?? I take criticism well; have I angered you all ...

This was really good. I'm kind of sad to say I liked it more than I did Red Vendetta... but I hope you continue this story. Reading made my throat ...

This was a lot better, actually. Edwin seems like a bit of a creeper... but I have guyphobia. Maybe he'll grow on me with time. I think everything was pretty ...

I'm just going to focus on chapter five; and one remark: your method of posting is a little confuddled. This is what you can do: Post part seven, for example. ...

Hello!~ I thought I'd check out your other work; and I found this!YAy. Okay, so you repeat that Charlie is a model a lot, a lot, a lot of times. ...