emmylou1995

Interesting. I can not decide if i like it or not. I think i do. Hey, it is drama and i love drama. Personally, (unlike thechocolatewritingcat), I like when there ...

I absolutely fell in love with this! When Chris climbs the tree to impress the girls he sounds like a real teenage boy. i love the description of him thinking ...

I liked this, how she thought it was a dream but it wasnt. I like that idea. But i almost did not read it. I cannot stand when people say ...

I liked the plot line alot. I had the same problem that airbear320 did. I totally did not understand this sentance: Just, she thought she was too noble to ever ...

I loved that. You had very nice description. My advice would be to space out your paragraphs. You had three really long paragraphs and I kept on losing my spot. ...

These are nice. Here is my advice. #1 A child laughs as A tree sways in the wind. and Deer drink the water I think this should be... trees sway ...

I liked this a lot. It was nice and flowed well at most points. Just like Pippiedooda said the second sentace saying you would tell us her story confused me. ...

This was interesting. I think you should put less detail and drama in the beginning chapter. It seems overdramatic. Draw out the Dying of Melissa and the news of the ...

Creepy. Creepy but really good. I have never read any poem with so vivid blood. I especially like the last two lines: When you finally emit a scream The dripping ...