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Duuuude, Parker isn't transanything. Parker's as CIS as it gets. He's just super super flamboyantly gay, is all |: (also if he was transgender I'd just tell you to suck ...

parker's a man

You're very welcome! As for Matias: Temper is a good point, and it's definitely expandable. For example, his having a temper could also mean that he doesn't know when keeping ...

I've actually been told by multiple people that Parker is one of the most realistically human characters they've ever read /)_o I'm actually ridiculously glad that you chewed him out ...

TOLD YOU I GOT BETTER AT COMMAS (

Oh good lord this was beautiful xD Notes on Parker: Parker is currently dealing with a lot of LOVELY STUFF in his own personal life (which you see more of ...

Omg Audy I hope you understand how broadly I just smiled

Commas are so fun :c Seriously though, the amount of times I typed out a comma and went, "Wait, Lucrezia would so point that out. That's not a necessary comma ...

All I have to say about commas is that they and Braz go together like... I don't know, Braz's voice is just really hard to write correctly without them. xD ...

a) I SUCK AT THE DIALOGUE THING. I will fix that. Yes. And try to actively remember it for next time? I always forget. b) Pan, as in pansexual, as ...

Hey! So, as for making that transition flow a little better, firstly, I'd put a timestamp on the chapters. Like: "Chapter 1 Will" and: "Chapter 2 Jet" Just because it ...

On character development:I swear the characters grow xD They've been in my head for YEARS now, and I've pretty much just started a version of the novel that I'm okay ...

Dude omg you totally opened my eyes to hospital imagery (that was not sarcasm, I swear. Literal hit with an inspiration stick). And! Parker is not, indeed, creeped out by ...

On Timmy's: If one is Canadian, one will know what I'm talking about xD It refers to coffee from Tim Horton's, which is a Canadian chain... deli-coffee place thing. It's ...

Woo! I love it when people can take constructive crit. Because seriously, this story's got a world of potential. A few tweaks will make it absolutely glorious. I kind of ...