dreaming_mouse

You've confused me with the Sam thing :oops: I was just using her as an example in the reply where you used her there's no one called Sam in my ...

I don't have anything against editing I'm still editing something four years ago and the stuff about the characters is sprinkled throughout the story. Thats why I don't understand how ...

It's a prologue because it just doesn't look right when it goes straight into chapter one - the story continually changes from the past to the present. Maybe I should ...

Except they are complete in my mind, I have everything about them worked out down to the last detail - just because I might not have put it down doesn't ...

Thanks for the crit guys - I admit I have terrible grammar thats something I try to fix in the final version Anyway Snoink in chapter one you said this: ...

It might do but it kinda has an important role in the story :oops: it's not something I just added because I was staring at the teddy on my desk...not ...

Thanks for the Matt! I will go over and put in the commas and fix the grammar in a bit, but it's always been my weak spot - damn grammar! ...

Lol! The perfect way to name kids XD

I love this song, I think that if the person has the right voice it's beautiful. I think you've made a good choice XD good luck with it

I have loads of Final Fantasy ones on my PC do you want me to get them for you later aniar? I'd get them now but I'm too lazy to ...

Hey guys thanks for the crit, when you say describe the cannon do you mean what it actually looks like or the graffati on it or both? Again thanks for ...

I thought it was dull as anything. It seemed like you were trying to be mysterious at the beginning, but it didn't work, nor does there appear to be any ...

O...k... Mesh, did you really have to criticise EVERY little grammar mistake Mouse made? That was a little harsh... I thought this was a great story, and the twist at ...

Sorry, But I really liked your Eternity stories. I think you should carry on. And yes, this was good but like kate, it is a bit bumpy. Also, this is ...

Yeah, it was a pretty good story. I can see where this is going and got the general feel. I think you need to add more description, though. yea I ...