dragonfphoenix

"If only she was weak...Hey, maybe we have to keep her from drinking the blood. Maybe the more she drinks, the stronger she gets. Maybe that's why the only word ...

Oh, I didn't expect you to change that, I just couldn't keep a straight face through that section. But I will probably be the rare exception to the norm

yes, better. I haven't checked the head part 2 yet

Did you repost this yet? I still see a semi-colon, but didn't check the quotes yet. :D glad you liked it. So now you understand that connection. Btw, that entire ...

Ah, sorry. Well, basically I was saying that I felt that if you try to write something sympathetic towards the gay audience, then those issues and that focus would clash ...

I see I could and should have expressed my position a little better. Of course that philosophy is completely ridiculous!!! But why would you write in a system that people ...

Understood and acknowledged. I shall deeply consider it during the revision process. *face palms* Well that was brilliant. I can't believe I didn't see that. Thank you, that shall be ...

Glad you like the series. Well, here's to answer all of the writing related pointers. "That's ugly, worse than silver" is not a comma splice: a comma splice is fusing ...

I shall do my best. Thoughts on this chapter: Anne feels too unfamiliar. At times she feels unrealistic, especially with her mood swings, yet at the same time there's that ...

where'd it go???? I wanted to review AND IT'S GONE!!! ;..(

I am simply relaying what the rules of Grammar state. However, if you feel it advantageous to ignore them, that is your authorial decision. But glad to help in whatever ...

Yes, I can understand your confusion. This was just the "opening" portion of it-there is more- but I just haven't written it out yet. Example: the Tamago will come, and ...

maybe as early as the first chapter. at the very least put it before you use it for the first time.

yes, you can edit a posted work. Just click "Publishing Center" at the top of the page, then find the work in the correct folder on the left side of ...

yes; read the reply to lostthoughts' comment