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Hey Stone! Dogs here with your review today! So this is an interesting and very different poem from what I see everyday which is good because I read a lot ...

"Of course I do, I missed you ." you really don't need a period at the end of this quotation, and don't put a space in-between "you" and the period. ...

"I hear the scraping and scratching of metal rubbing up against metal." This is kinda an awkward line because you use metal twice in such close proximity. Also this is ...

"Though she tried they would not gather" This line is repudiative to the last line where you said: "gathering her thoughts". So in this case if you find yourself repeating ...

"It was like seeing a full puzzle all put together instead of seeing just a pile of pieces" This is a little awkwardly worded and you use "seeing" twice in ...

Hello Lego! Dogs here with your review today! This is a very good piece and I really enjoy it because it does very well what a prologue aims to do. ...

Hello Sana! Dogs here with your review today! This is a good piece, strong imagery and strong emotion that you pour in to here so props to you on that! ...

Hey DreamWalker!!! Dogs here with your review today! I don;t believe I have ever reviewed a piece of yours... anyways here I am!!!! So just on a starting point, I ...

Hello Mithrim! Here is your review as promised ;). So this is a good piece, has a simple and easy idea behind with nice rhyming. Although sometimes in your writing ...

"With face crushed onto the dirt..." There should be a "my" in here. So like: With my face crushed onto the dirt... "A terribly, terribly human" wouldn't the second "terribly" ...

"from all across the world disappeared.And..." There needs to be a space in-between the period and "and" "a few where heros and men of god who never strayed from the ...

Hey ShadowLight!!! Dogs here with your review today!!!!!!!!!!!!!! On a side note... Woot woot! Go Dyslexia!!! BAD SPEELERS UNITE!!! Lol I totally understand what you are saying so I am ...

Hey Mystical! Dogs here with your review today! I don't know if i should have but I found a lot of this story really funny and then I realized at ...

"Dimly shining streetlight" A very good line but I think it would sound better if you say: Dimly lit streetlight "She looked in fact like a little angel" Hahahaha how ...

"I Do not want to be discovered by these men" I don't like this line, it is awkwardly worded and it doesn't explain why, I mean I definitely understand why ...