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Re: Playthings [rewritten version]
HI there! Dexterra here :) I really have no faults to this at all - bar a few grammar mistakes which were already picked up by others. This was a ...
Sep 17, 2010 -
Re: [September Contest] The Postman
He went into fetal position as he anticipated what he knew was coming, a wail of agony escaping his lips. Perhaps you could say, he slip off the chair and ...
Sep 17, 2010 -
Re: Deleted
Cute story :) Pumpkins sat about me on our old front porch. I picked at the peeling red paint on the steps as the cold breeze made goose bumps run ...
Sep 13, 2010 -
Re: Dead Nyte- Dead Dream (Chap. 1)
So far, it's quite interesting. There's just a few mistakes, which I picked up, but so far from that it's pretty good in terms of grammar and such. “No! Go ...
Sep 2, 2010 -
Re: Cyclone-The forgotton of the X-Men
First off, great potential. Really interesting - I want moar!! Not many mistakes, just some small grammar and punctuation. "A tall, rugged man swallowed the last of the whisky in ...
Sep 1, 2010 -
Re: Molly - Chapter 1
Hi there :) This is my first review, so I hope I give you some helpful stuff to work with! First off, try not to start a story with a ...
Sep 1, 2010
