denj

I haven't read the beginning, but this was a good bit. I didn't really find any grammatical errors to nit-pick over, but one thing I found strange was your excessive ...

I, despite being male, immensely enjoyed the entire Twilight saga and Meyer's other book, The Host. I know the series is commonly regarded as "girl books" but I really would ...

Despite a very few minor mistakes, most of which have already been pointed out, this is a very intriguing and well-written story you've got going. The pacing, which you asked ...

The style in which you wrote in this story really captured my attention. It was extremely well-written, balancing descriptions in the present, dialogue, thought, character description, and even throwi

This is an intriguing piece of writing you've got started here, and I'd like to see where it's going to go from here. As far as actual content, the piece ...

I'm a big fan of the Redwall books, and this is probably the best fanfic I've read so far (but I haven't read many)! It would be hard to come ...

I think you could reword the first line a bit, because it doesn't sound quite right to say "the one constant thing in my life," if she has a secret ...