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Wow, this was well written. But, all stories aren't perfect. (Yet :D ) So, here's a quick edit. Now, I usually talk about the characters in my critiques, so I'll ...

Hmmm, this is getting quite interesting. You have quite a bit of work to do on it though.... it's not bad. :D I won't be as nit-picky as Pips over ...

............ Okay bud, first of all, you need to have two reviews before you post a story. It's a 2:1 ratio. Second of all, you need to use proper grammar ...

Hi Armagan!! I've been waiting for ages for this!! It's really coming along! :D And now for the review! I will butcher it and tear it to shreds! :D Dad ...

Okaaaaaay, I haven't read a lot of the Artemis Fowl books, but I do know what you're talking about.... kinda. And now for the fun part!!! :D Like Ofir said, ...

Okay bud. Couple of pointers. First of all, you need to keep the 2:1 ratio on stories. For every story, you need two reviews. Get one more review for me ...

Go Pippie!!! All though, I was totally ready to give the big review, thanks for that!! my comments are just suggestions so ignore them if you want hope I've helped! ...

Ditto with Threnody. Also, like Jay said, you need to have 2 reviews. Just letting you know. My baby brother Jack and my parents were getting burned alive in its ...

Helloooo Elitehusky, are you ready for the edit of your life? Let the edit begin!!! There once was a purple paperclip Despite it’s location, it was quite pleased To the ...

Yeah, I agree with Meep. It is really morbid. But there is one thing I'd like you to do. As you probably know, here at YWS we have a 2:1 ...

I have to agree with tnme22. It is quite lengthy for a prologue. For further notice, don't make your chapters that long like tnme22 said. We don't like reviewing HUGE ...

Hello again!!! I can't wait to edit this!!! I'm so excited!! (Don't worry, I do this to many people when I get asked to edit!! He he) Prepare for an ...

Hellooo Armagan! I would love to edit this for you! LOL! :smt081 And I am so glad you want people to be harsh! All though some have said I am ...

Hellooooooo Maki-chan!! I really like your story. Although it reminds me of a bloody version of Edgar Allen Poe's 'A tell tale heart' with a bit more religion involved. Anywho, ...

Hi borntoshop. Welcome to YWS. I know you might've heard this, but there is a 2:1 ratio on reviews that is mandatory. And I'll do a simpler review on you. ...