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Hi @IAmTraunt! Pros I like this chapter! You have addressed the issues discussed in the previous chapter, where Rae and Kris have a reason to fall in love (well, she ...

I'll jump right in. Cons There are quite a few grammar and spelling errors in your writing, even in previous chapters. Examples include incorrect use of there/their, your/you're, its/it's, mixing ...

Hey pal! I'm going to try do super brief reviews, since I'm speed reviewing to get to your most recent chapter. Pros I like the action here, we've got a ...

You seem to use "its" often, when you should use "it's". I remind myself which one it is by breaking down the shortened version and seeing if it makes sense. ...

Hi donizback! I have promised myself never to review poetry because it is not my strength, but I will do so on your request. I keep wondering through the poem ...

Hello Shane! My review as promised, since that is the reason you posted your story that you worked so hard on. I have to say, I like how you kept ...

Hello! Well done Pompadour! It has been awhile since I read the scene you adapted, so I'm not sure if you kept the facts accurate, but I think you did ...

Hi fight4! First of all, good job on this story! I was absorbed in it, and genuinely worried about Jessica's choices, as I can see many ways she could get ...

Hi SARA! This is a response to your official review request that you posted on the forum :-) I like the characterisation of the story so far, you have a ...

First thing that jumped out at me about all of your writing, is that you don't seem to believe in capitalising any letters at all. This is incredibly distracting, because ...

GREAT poem! I respect any poet who can pull off rhyme and reason simultaneously - ie it had a musical tone to it and still made sense in it's progression. ...

Hi Cheer, A very chilling story! You have written first person present tense quite well, make sure you're consistent going forward. I like how you have expressed the dislike for ...

Hi JCat, This is going to be a long one! I gave my review as a fresh reader, and I hope you find it informative. The choice is yours at ...

Good start, JCat ;-) The first tip I would give you is try and make your character's gender more obvious. I was reading through assuming "I" was a girl, but ...

What a sad story, and so believable that it would happen. At first I thought it was a suicide note, so I was really relieved when it turns out it ...