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Hey Dono, Here’s the review ^^ I know you prefer overall comments, and I’ll give them, but I’ll still point out some little things =] dying wish damning my body ...

^_^ Hey again. I didn’t have Mama’s eye. I'm not sure what you mean with this. “WHAT?” Personally I think lower case italics would look a better. Caps tend to ...

Hey there, I'll be nitpicky, if you don't mind :wink: and working on the belief that “us honourables should stick together,” Capitalize the H. Crash bang, punch flying, limbs flailing, ...

Hey ^^ I enjoyed reading this. It was a random fragment, yes, but it didn't matter so much. You developped everything good enough for this to stand on its own. ...

Hey there ^^ Hope the review is useful : I watched blue-white fire corse along the spine of my home causing the outer sphere to collapse. [s]corse[/s] course. Then I ...

Hey there, I've noticed that this is the last of the parts that is on YWS, so I'm hoping you'll be posting more sometime. When you do, try to remember ...

I'm sure you had no idea that I was going to be reviewing this ;) I'm quite fascinated by this story, which is why I'm reviewing all of the parts. ...

It’s me. Again. ^_^ I find it interesting how your character interacts with "herself". It’s complicated to give a voice (or thoughts) attitude, without being able to describe the person ...

Guess who’s back? Yup. Me. Wooo ^^ Here it goes: Again! Why italics? I fought the war to bottle the screams and take a look at the damage. Bottle? Do ...

Hey again, Here’s the review: Ouch! That hurt! Not too fond of this beginning. It doesn’t work so well as an opening sentence for a chapter. You’ll need something stronger. ...

Hey there. I’m on a reviewing spree, and will be reviewing all parts of this story that are up right now. Hope that makes you a happy panda - so ...

Haha !! I love this ! It's so absolutely random ^^ (Hermione appears, barely dressed) *grins* You're epic. Harry: Oh, shucks. I love the comments Harry makes. And Hermione's whole ...

Hey there, First off, I'm going to second (third?) what the previous reviewers said; ^_^ it's romantic, and adorable! Yeah, wish I was feeling like that. I love this! With ...

Hey there, ^_^ Before I start being nitpicky, I'd like to mention that I thought this was a good piece of work. It caught my attention, and held it all ...

Hey there, I'll be your reviewer today ^_^ First off - I think you should split up your paragraphs. They're huge! Now, let's get on with the nitpicks :wink: Rushing ...