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Hey there, Seeing as you have no reviews yet, I'm here to check your story out. It had been a morning filled with cherry blossoms, sprinkling the ground like candies ...

Here as requested :] I decided that, after Ohagi put me to bed, I would kill my father. I don't think you need the first comma. not a dead one, ...

Here as per request ^^ Feel free to come back and leave me another piece to review, anytime. Only today was Thursday. Today was a Thursday would sound better. Clair ...

Here as requested, KJ dearest! I enjoyed reading that - you write very well - and I think you've done a great job with developping the characters. You focus on ...

Hey there, Here as requested =] No. The one opposite me was breathing slightly. I watched her chest go up and down, sighing in the relief that I wasn’t responsible ...

*snuggles kitteh* Thanks for posting this, it's awesome. Don't want nitpicks ? Aww, but they're so fun to do. I'll do my best to resist the temptation >.> I love ...

Hey there, Connie dearest. Here as requested (though, I'm sorry, very late.) Just a few little nitpicks: Repetition. You use tormented, then tornmenters, almost consequtive sentences. The word "caw" i

Hey there, Teddy dearest! Here as requested ^_^ The new boy’s mother was pushing him in his wheelchair. The class stared at him, disbelieving their eyes. disbelieving their eyes isn't ...

Hey there, Connie dearest! ^^ The streets of the town were lonely, save for the dust that the breeze stirred up on occasion; forming into tiny vortexes that waltzed down ...

Stella dearest ^^ I came back to review part 3 as promised. As the other parts are, this one, too, is adorably cute. The entire concept may be prone to ...

*salutes* Here as requested, Poppy dearest ! You've asked for an overall, so I'll be sure to do that. The occasional nitpick might appear randomly... I find it hard to ...

Hello there, Thai ^^ *Refrains from biting you* =] Heh, okay. Review it is. She was my aristocratic, Aristocats watching princess with brown curly hair. To me, it looked as ...

Hey there, my Adna dearest ^_^ So, here's your general opinion review of the poem, seeing as I am rather failacular at it myself and am therefor incapable of giving ...

Hey there, KJ. Loved by strangers and a hypnotizing sex symbol with her music. This sentence doesn’t flow so well. Restructure it, maybe? Something along the lines of “Loved by ...

Hey there ^_^ Here for the review, as requested! Review for part I. Your opening sentence is great - it caught my attention immediatly. By all means, do not change ...