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Re: An Ode to divorce a.k.a. Wendy's Last Poem
I was pretty sad. I will work on it
Sep 30, 2006 -
Re: Aleana
PET PEEVES> "as though". ick (x2) runing through trees= metephoric jogging becomes out of place. YWS needs to have a category for first drafts.
Sep 29, 2006 -
Re: To set an example (MY FIRST WRITING POST)
Thank you for your critique, Bob.
Sep 28, 2006 -
Re: To set an example (MY FIRST WRITING POST)
not my intentions, my apologies to all who read this. Did I fix ok? Anyway, thier reactions were exactly what I was looking for from this piece. The entire 'idea' ...
Sep 27, 2006 -
Re: To set an example (MY FIRST WRITING POST)
You too SNOIK? (I know you didnt yell snoik, but that brit sure did) :-(
Sep 27, 2006 -
Re: To set an example (MY FIRST WRITING POST)
WTF! I was having fun here for like the first three days. I write something after I was inspired by a friend, and I realize it is not going to ...
Sep 27, 2006 -
Re: Untitled -- Suggestions welcome
Ach. My is repeated too much. Try simplifying the sentence. Suggestion: “Why did you summon me?” I asked, bowing my head with eyes closed. My hair slid to the front ...
Sep 26, 2006 -
Re: .
Clumpy? I want to fall in love again.
Sep 25, 2006 -
Re: Untitled -- Suggestions welcome
Ummm. I feel like I am missing the point.
Sep 24, 2006