deirdredawne

"Let’s listen to the trees lullaby," - does it belong to the tree? tree's "The inexistent sound drums in the wave of imagination" I'm not sure if it's just me ...

I agree with the above and have some additional comments: "A red Subaru sped down I-40. Its rattling engine echoed over fields of harvested farmland, uninterrupted by other travelers." I ...

Quite a powerful peice, especially know its base came in truth. There are not many things to fix. spelling mistakes like scents and sense. but aside from that all seemed ...

An interesting prologue to say the least. Historical no doubt, i am quite intrigued. I find some of the descriptions run on and cuse more editing. I imagine this is ...

I can't help but agree. It is hard to find errors when your so enveloped in the emotion you have given us. I'm sorry for your loss, but grateful for ...

Well to start i quite enjoyed the dream time. Some little nit picks: "For a moment, her posture seemed absurd." - why was it absurd? “I can’t count them all, ...

To start, this was quite an interesting read and out of my norm. Now onto some editing. First off, I was quite confused with the location. I think you should ...

Very festive, to begin with. I could see this moving into a longer story, the base is here. There were some minor grammatical and spelling errors, (The exclamation marks at ...

I agree with the above. In the beginning I was intrigued and quite interested, imagining Marmee Noir from the Anita Blake novels in this 'narrator'. But it became repetitive and ...

I enjoyed this and agree with teh above comments. The paragraphs make reading quite choppy. I would have enjoyed a bit more description earlier on. Get me into the mood ...

I agree. I read twilight and the rest of the series when they first came out. dating me as this was over 5 years ago now. Then I thought it ...

I agree with Drawers absolutely. It is so hard to nitpick when the overal impression is of competence and yes, an author . That was exactly what I thought when ...

I enjoyed this. and agree with most of the reviewers. From what I have read you have left it open to go into as many different directions as you want. ...