daydreamer9

This is a very touching piece. I like how you used a subject for conventional for the foundation of your poem. It's very simple and can relate to many. I ...

This piece perfectly depicts the confusion attached to love. All in all, I thouroghly enjoyed the piece, but I do have some critiques. You are sitting next to that person ...

General Note: Big paragraphs tend to dissuade readers. Try shortening them. First of all, remember that with each quote, you should start a new paragraph. There are many instances in ...

This story stangely touched me. I cannot truly review it, even though I believe there are some grammatical errors. Incredible work. My only suggestion is to try simplify some of ...

Wow. This is a very touching piece. I was amazed by the meaning and the percpective. I do have some critiques though. Her alarm screeches, 6:00 A.M., but she is ...

The intonation was marvelous. I'm not quite one to critique poetry . . . or maybe I'm just blinded by the deeper meaning in "Bright Lights". :] It did in ...

This is a very complex piece for me and I think it's a little hard to review. Maybe it's because I enjoyed the story so much! First off, your dialogue ...

All in all, I think this a great first chapter. There are a few gramatical errors and some other suggections I have for you though. First of all, you say ...

I think you are off to a good start. A few things did confuse me, but overall it was entertaining. Who is Eagle? and if he gave Jackson money which ...

This is a very true poem is very true. Too many people look out of a 'tainted window'. My only advice is, if possible to find a stronger end word. ...

Real poetry should capture you and take you into a deep state of emotion. Never have I felt so compassionate about a character in a poem. This is an amazing ...

This is sounds like a very interesting contest! What you have is quite heart touching. You've laid a good foundation, but I believe you could improve it. I suggest that ...

This is an interesting start to a fantasy story. I can guess where this might be turning, and am quite interested. It seems like you are off to a good ...