dante93

I agree with the others. I can see what you were trying to say, but the punctuation needs to be looked at some. In some ways this poem seems like ...

Thanks. This was actually what I was originally going to do for my talent show, but they said it was too dark. They loved it though. You should have seen ...

Thanks guys. I needed as pick me up after a shitty day at work. Yes I was baptized Catholic, but I am an atheist now, and I shall read it ...

Thanks to all of you. Some weird stuff has happened to inspire this poem. But yes she does. Ah a tortured soul knows all. anyway thanks again for the comments. ...

thanks. Poem is a bit over dramatic i see. i wrote it at 4 in the morning for a performance I had to do that day. It worked out, but ...

Thanks for the comments. I did see that cliche. i have fixed and sent to poem to my Aunt, oh and the last part breaking the flow with my, is ...

Than you. Yeah some people are still building a shed near my house, so I haven't had time to look back at this, but i will soon and I will ...

Thanks Juniper for your comment. I am reworking this poem right now actually. I did not get a chance to look at it last night, but I will repost later ...

This poem is cool. I especially like how you put bona fide in bold. Anyway, great poem. Keep writing these types.

Yes it does seem to be written by a zombie. I totally agree, especially given the title. "A Mind's Revenge". Does that not sound like something a zombie would be ...

It does. I see what your saying with the whole why thing. I looked back at my "revision". I actually deleted the last half of it off, and rewrote it. ...

Thanks. Not out of any disrespect but did you see what I wrote at the bottom. I've worked this poem over since I posted. I'll revise soon. I meant this ...

I don't need sarcasm on a review.

First of all I said read the divine comedy. You would get a better understanding of what I was trying to say. I had no interest in fully using the ...

Just for the record I was not trying to rhyme.