dannyr122

I think this is a clever idea. The thing that i find detracts from the overall piece is the rhyming problem you have. You go in and out of rhyming ...

This story sounds like it is going to be very good however i found bits of it a little repetitive and confusing. the first paragraph starts off very well. I ...

Very good. Cleverly done. Like others i dont think it is a dramatic poem but i loved it. One point though Hey . . . wait a second It is ...