coolperson321

Aww...that's sad. The story I mean, not your writing! You are an awesome writer. You're good with descriptions, and I was able to imagine the scene clearly. I would say ...

Try giving your characters more emotion. The readers have to feel what they are feeling. If your character is sad, the readers should feel sad too. If he is happy, ...

That was awesome! You really drew me in tot he story. I could Imagine everything clearly in my mind. I noticed a few little mistakes, though. I won't mention them ...