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Re: The Power of a Smile
Oh my goodness, this is really good. It was a little confusing at first though. I'm not sure if you want critism on it since it was a school project ...
Sep 28, 2011 -
Re: Red Rose,Black Rose,& Purple Rose
Ok. So, I caught a lot of mistakes. Like the other reviewers said, its pretty crucial to add paragraphs and spacings. The readers see it and their eyes already glaze ...
Aug 8, 2011 -
Re: Antolsai - I
Ooh I really like this. I thought it wouldn't have interested me and captured my attention to it that much since it was a short piece but.. Wow! I'm looking ...
Jul 27, 2011 -
Re: The sand and the sea
Aw, I really like this story. It's really cute. (: BUT, I do have some things to comment on, hahah. Is there a way to add indents? If you're on ...
Jul 26, 2011 -
Re: Zombie.0
This is really good! But maybe add some more emotion to your writing? Like was fear gripping his heart or something like that. I didn't read the other comments so ...
Jul 26, 2011 -
Re: My Immortal
Wow. This is amazing. It made me feel so hollow inside just reading it. It made me want to curl up in my bed like she did and sob all ...
Jul 25, 2011 -
Re: Lost and Found
Ooh. This is pretty different from things I normally read, but I like it! :) I think I'll leave the criticsm up to other readers. Hahah Well, cant wait to ...
Jul 25, 2011 -
Re: This strange new world
This is so good! :P Can't wait until you write more! I'll leave the criticism up to someone else to do. ;) -CookEmonster
Jul 25, 2011 -
Re: Imagine, if you will......
You have noo idea how much in love I am with this! Hahah, I loooove it! xD BUT, of course, I have some things to criticize(; I don't know why ...
Jul 25, 2011 -
Re: Mr. Angel...[Chapter 4] ALIA
Alia's character is really complex. Maybe take a little time to explain her more? I have lots of trouble trying to keep up with her personality so much that it ...
Jul 25, 2011 -
Re: Take A Chance- 16
Yay! Good chapter. (: (As always! I love your story xD ) And it was definetely exciting to me! Can't wait for the next chapter! :) -CookEmonster
Jul 21, 2011 -
Re: Take A Chance- 15 (part two)
WRITE MORE. PLEEASE. I'm having 'Take A Chance Deprivation'! D: (If there were such a thing that is, hahahah.) This story is SO good! AHH. I literally cannot wait for ...
Jul 17, 2011 -
Re: Letters To My Sister.
I agree with 567ajt, you make me feel ashamed of my own writing too! This is such an amazing story. I wouldnt be able to write anything as close to ...
Jul 17, 2011 -
Re: Soul Reaper
I love it! I can't wait to read more! I really like the description you put in it. The story seemed to bring me out of reality and into it. ...
Jul 17, 2011 -
Re: Manifestation: Part 1
ITS SO GOOD. ADD MORE, HURRY. xD I love it so far! hahha, I really like how you feel like your part of the story and all. This is definetely ...
Jul 7, 2011