colourcrazed

This story had a very tender tone, and I liked it very much. The description of the girl was also very well done. However, I think you could have developed ...

This was really fun and interesting to read, and there was a great use of suspense and foreshadowing. However, I think you could have developed the plot and the characters' ...

That exact same thing is happening to me, although I haven't quite gotten to the part where I fall for him. It's a great plotline, very relatable. However, it could ...

I am really impressed with how quickly you are able to develop the characters and their personalities. You also used the last sentence very well to heighten the suspense created ...