Young Writers Society

thank you so much for your critique; it is very helpful.

:) thank you very much for your words. though i don't quite understand what you mean by "though I see a gap in between the description of the focus as ...

thank you so much :)

This is beautiful and something so many people can relate with. The only thing I could mention would be the use of "dark" twice. A different adjective would make it ...

I also disliked the use of thy. However, the rest of it was incredible -- I really loved reading it. "Be not my world, where specks of white on thy ...

This made me smile so much! It's something that would be perfect for a greeting card. It was so simple but so meaningful, great work.