cnvalambrosia

In this you realize how contempt he is. I like how you show that he is contempt without stating it...... I hope you understand this. But, I'll be frank. It ...

I liked this. Werewolves are my favorite so that hit home. It didn't give away to much at one time and kinda kept you wondering. ALTHOUGH, at some points it ...

"pools of blue"? it would make sense that you mean her eyes here, but then it doesn't when you realize that she's sleeping and her eyes are closed. Unless you ...

i agree with the last post... Be mysterious. State your purpose vivdly and to the point... But don't divulge too much information at one time. If you do this the ...

I like it. It's melacholy with a touch of hope. It reminds me of Gone With The Wind at the end when Scarlet screams into the fog...."for tomorrow is a ...

I'd like to know more about the aliens before he inihalates them...their motives-names- planets----..... some stories skip that , which is wierd because its very important. Senseless killing kills me.

:D :wink: I think this was a very good piece.........i hope you weren't expecting help on grammar..1. i wouldn't notice..2. it wouldn't matter to me...(as u can tell :roll: :D ...

That is so sweet. it makes me think of peter pan. You did a great job and considering that I(who is half blind when it comes to reading stuff on ...