chunkybean77

This is so well done. Honestly, I'm not sure what to criticize, because it feels so raw and speaks so directly to heartbreak and coming-of-age, something all readers can relate ...

Hey! I want to start off by saying that the way you use descriptions is really refreshing. For example: "The sunlight began to deepen, glowing more orange now" It's simple ...

Ooooooh, this is creepy. I thought you did a great job showing the narrator's bitterness. The scene with the children definitely caught me off-guard. I especially like this description: "What ...