chucki666

this should be kept in journal, but i do like it, maybe others woulndt be intrested, but i was, i kneew how you felt and what you thought. It was ...

Overall, the story was alright, it could be better thhough. I agree, you do use Lance way too much. i have to say that "Violet noticed that Lance’s hands slipped ...

i agree with SeraphTree, i didn't like this story. She was too dramatic, not enough realism, and she makes it seem like she's incredibly bitchy all the time, and lust ...

i agree with Stella Thomas , the whole beautiful thing sounds too cliché. I mean she has beauty, but describe it, don't just say it. Otherwise, i thought the story ...

I agree with Icaruss, just too much dialogue, and i skipped most of it, all i got was her boyfriend broke up with her and a matter of minutes her ...

uhm, i really like the idea of the plot, you know? its really good. I think its a little over-dramatic. Take your time with the situations that happen, just don't ...