christine

"Someone tapped on the door of the cave. "Come in," Said Tarina" umm, how does a cave have a door? apart from that little mistake, i think your very (very ...

awesome poem, i loved the colour description, and especially the ending. very effective. however if your lines run into each other, you need to make sure you dont forget to ...

great job, i was feeling really sorry for her and was pretty much like "no why! give her a chance" and such which is really good. i felt like i ...

to be honest the concept of the story seems good, and there is a lot of potential, however it lacks description, what are they seeing, feeling, touching, tasting you know ...

wow i must say that was A-M-A-Z-I-N-G!! i cant wait to see what happens! i loved the way you described the race itself, and the last line was very effective. ...

i think your story is very well detailed, but acts more like a i did this then i did that. but otherwise i think its awesome. very detailed in the ...

i love the way you did the "a fortnight earlier" i thought that was cool, seeing as you didnt just skip straight into the story One of them explained. You ...